Seeking some critquing for my writing?

I'm not sure I understand. If the sun went out, wouldn't we all die instantly? Why would we wish for that? Also, the moon orbits the earth on a 29 day cycle so it rises at a different time each night. Once per month it actually doesn't rise at all. This is called a new moon. Anyway, maybe your writing is too "smart" for me because I don't quite get it. Thanks for posting it though.